Thursday, 29 August 2013

First of the Month Fiction - September

Rules & examples here. Quick version, 100 words exactly, or less than 30. Put it in the comments then link your blog so we can see what you do when unrestricted.

Mine is again of the 100 word variety, and of course, the misery or creepy variety, as I just don't seem to have the knack for the happy ones. I will try my hand at a happy one again December, but I really wasn't pleased with the one back in July, so this was one of the others that evolved from that idea of the gift of a flower...


The Gift

He had forgotten my birthday that year, so what he did next stung all the more. He'd been too busy with work, he apologised. “I understand. It doesn’t matter” I offered.

Yet all she had to do was mention a book she wanted to read and he rushed out, the very same day and got it for her, delivering it to her door on the way home. “I was in the shop and saw it. It’s no big deal.”

But it was to me. I could no longer make any more excuses. That was the day he broke my heart.



Also, for those that didn't win the Ubud writers festival story prize, but want to share their story, I'll do a special link up for that instead of Octobers FOTMF. So should you not be in Ubud, you do a link up from here. Anyone who just wants to write a story of any length can link up too. (This time a little differently, post your story on your blog and do the link up here so we know where to read it - will explain on the post next month.)

Have a great September everyone! Linking up With Some Grace
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16 comments:

  1. Anonymous29 August 2013 at 14:52

    He forgot her birthday so rushed her a gift at the next opportunity. That gesture broke her heart. What has this man done in their past?

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  2. Lydia C. Lee29 August 2013 at 15:01

    ahhh, I need to work on subjects/objects - 2 different women, "I" and "She"...good feedback tho. That's the second time I've done that.

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  3. Anonymous29 August 2013 at 19:18

    You have a gift :)
    I have the ability to waffle.
    I don't know how you get me in with so little said...

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    1. Lydia C. Lee29 August 2013 at 22:59

      You're being nice - I need to work on stronger voice and less ambiguity in the culling of words...interesting process tho, as it still seems clear in my head, but I know the original idea...(I'm the queen of waffle!)

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    2. Lydia C. Lee29 August 2013 at 23:00

      :) (incase that reads funny) Where are your holiday pics???? Some of us a HANGING on them!

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    3. Anonymous1 September 2013 at 20:35

      I am also the queen of waffle!
      Keep an eye out next week for the start of the holiday posts :)

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  4. Grace29 August 2013 at 21:40

    I loved the finality of "That was the day he broke my heart"

    You've inspired me to try it this month!
    I'll be in Ubud in November...What's this Writers' Festival?

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    1. Lydia C. Lee29 August 2013 at 23:02

      There was a competition for the Ubud writers festival and I sent it to some of the bloggers that do FOMF, so I figured, as they didn't make the final 10, they may want a forum to show what they wrote. You're welcome to just post a story you've written, of any length next month.
      And lucky you going to Ubud (but the writers festival is October)

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  5. Anonymous29 August 2013 at 23:00

    I did have to read twice but I see you were talking about being 'the other' woman, not you but the character! x

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    1. Lydia C. Lee29 August 2013 at 23:06

      yes, need stronger defining. Or clearer outline. Will maybe reassess this idea and see what I come up with.

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  6. Lydia C. Lee29 August 2013 at 23:19

    That said, I still like this one better than the one with the kid and the teacher. Which I really didn't like.

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  7. Tegan Churchill30 August 2013 at 17:13

    This looks interesting. I'll give it a go. So do we post the story in the comments here and then just link up our whole blog site?

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    1. Lydia C. Lee30 August 2013 at 17:23

      Yes, short story in comments here and then link your site so people an see what else yOu do. S

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  8. Lydia C. Lee30 August 2013 at 17:37

    So yOu Don't tarnish your own blog with such frippery...:)

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  9. Tegan Churchill1 September 2013 at 00:09

    She watched him move through the crowd. Watched him flinch at the touch. She saw the stories told on his face.

    He saw her watching. The recognition of pain shared passed between them. The world was oblivious to their moment.

    He hid his face, unable to bear the pain. The stories untold hanging in the air.

    She turned and let him brush past, pretending they were strangers in the night. Denying their connection, for fear of rejection.

    Lost connections cut deep.

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  10. Lydia C. Lee1 September 2013 at 00:57

    Wow!! Love it!!

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