Monday, 28 July 2014

First of the Month Fiction - August

The offering this month was the beginning of a longer story that I was trying to write for a competition but I just couldn't get it to go anywhere. I like the idea as a starting point but am a little directionless in where to go next (thus the clumsy car crash) and the characters weren't strong enough to carry it further. So it's rather inadequate, unfortunately, but may turn into something down the track - feel free to chuck an idea my way...it's a fictional offcut:


We were driving home from school, and the kids were chattering merrily.

"Mummy, can I have some chocolate?" Olaf asked

"We don't have any, Sweetie"

"Yes we do. Daddy bought some at the shop"

Ruby pipped up angrily. "Shh, You aren't supposed to say anything!"

"What do you mean?" I asked, confused.

Ruby grinned proudly "Daddy got some chocolates to send to his friend but he didn't want you to know about it. So he told us to keep it a secret."

My mind spun circles for an instant, but the crunching metal and shattering of glass suddenly changed everything.


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You know me, when in doubt, kill 'em off!

Newbies, rules & examples here (100 words exactly or less than 30). Everyone, put your stories in the comments and link your blogs so we can see your unrestricted glory.

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13 comments:

  1. Leanne @ Deep Fried Fruit28 July 2014 at 14:24

    Noooooo. No crunching glass ....
    Leanne @ Deep Fried Fruit

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  2. Me28 July 2014 at 16:04

    Bloody blogger is doing it's lose your comment thing again !!!!!!
    I am sorry - I would probably go with killing them all off but that's just because I can't think of anything else to do with them so you probably want to go with someone else's suggestion !!!
    Have the best week !
    Me xox

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  3. Six Little Hearts28 July 2014 at 18:51

    Oh no!!!!

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  4. Em @ Have A Laugh On Me 28 July 2014 at 22:24

    NOOO you killed the wrong person, she wasn't the one cheating! Em - also visiting as part of #teamIBOT x

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    1. Lydia C. Lee29 July 2014 at 01:29

      Fair? Life is fair?? (Said with a broad grin)

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  5. Lisa @ Random Acts Of Zen28 July 2014 at 23:52

    Lydia, you're ruthless!

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    1. Lydia C. Lee29 July 2014 at 13:27

      hee, hee - after much mucking around (and going nowhere) I did have that moment when I thought 'ugh, you're boring me. I'll just kill you' and then I thought 'Man, that's a weird reaction...' ;)

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  6. Unknown29 July 2014 at 04:41

    Ooh I like it. I think you can definitely do something with that down the track.

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    1. Lydia C. Lee29 July 2014 at 13:28

      yeah, I like it in theory, but I wasted about half a day going nowhere...so I've missed the Toowoomba comp :(

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  7. Tegan Churchill30 July 2014 at 04:35

    Hmm it's hard to take it in a direction that isn't cliched and overdone, so I can see your dilemma. My brain is absolute mush lately so no end of the month fiction from me either.

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  8. Grace31 July 2014 at 02:25

    Wow. I did not see that coming! I really need to exercise my fiction writing muscle. I'm going to give this a go this month #determined.

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